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I feel I must point out that the 'older, historied' spelling is not actually older than the American spelling; before the American Revolution, there was very little standardization anyway. Some ...

.... Nice first line. ..... Good stuff, but I think "Your wet clothes flapping..." was where it got excellent. I don't like "empty chair". I want something more interesting there. ...

So I am remembering why I never review Galerius' poetry. But whatever, you have threatened and who am I to resist. Let's see. Criticism-wise-- I have to say, reading this ...

This feels less like a poem than an angry letter broken into lines. Which isn't necessarily a bad thing. But since you avoid imagery, choosing instead to focus on a ...

Really enjoyed this. I'm not going to do a line-by-line right now because my brain is currently about as functional as a dead dog-- I'll try to come back later-- ...

I like this a lot. This is very-- pretty, and sometimes it veers into beautiful, and because you put so much into the language I'm going to focus on the ...

I come tumbling down, falling into a world of upside down, where everyone is mad, and flowers talk and a sing. It's a land that's ruled by cards, and a ...

late summer in saltillo valley and the cotton fields spoof and Spoof? Sounds nice, but I can't quite get it to mean anything here. sprawl, and all you can see ...

The velvet darkness carves out lines of beauty hacking up deep curves, rhythmically distorting. The darkness carves out lines of beauty, or has lines of beauty carved in it? The ...

I release balloons into the sky and stare until the atmosphere has swallowed them and they are drowning in the sun. I very much like this opening, but the 'until' ...

glistening, skinned fruit – they lie on the dissecting trays still and unmoving, Still and unmoving? Redundant, that seems, and not to great effect. like disciplined children. fluking tubes, arterie

Open your mouth, I want to see your tongue, lolling and pink against the yellowed white of your teeth. Are you using again? Have I lost you? I like this ...

This poem really strongly reminded me of something, and I'm trying to remember what. Mostly, it's the imperative line-by-line format that does it, but still. There are some lovely turns ...

The Leaf As the golden sheets sway in the cooling breeze One is torn from its origins and swirls downward. In dismay, it stares up to where it had begun. ...

That ...drown, I got lost after 'down'; please, a little more guidance in the way of punctuation? made ... trampled. Wish on a star, I think. 'Too hazy for the ...